They Don’t See Me.

Winter shadows dark;

My truth is not apparent

out of the sunshine.

 

17 thoughts on “They Don’t See Me.

  1. Asha Rajan

    I love the sinister intrigue of this, and I think haiku is one of the hardest forms of poetry. You have to be so concise, and that juxtaposition is so hard to get right. You did it so well. The light/sunshine really does chase away the monsters!

  2. Nate

    Love the Jekyll and Hyde idea you describe, or maybe a wilting flower, but that interpretation might be because I know how much you hate winter.

  3. saroful

    I really like that you didn’t anchor “shadows” down as a noun or a verb in the first line; the poem changes meaning depending on what the reader’s assumption is about that word.

    1. Michelle Longo

      Thanks! I hadn’t, but then when I was reading the tutorial again to make sure I got it down it specifically said not to make it a sentence so I was glad to see it worked properly for the form. You write a really good poetry instructional piece.

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