I love the sinister intrigue of this, and I think haiku is one of the hardest forms of poetry. You have to be so concise, and that juxtaposition is so hard to get right. You did it so well. The light/sunshine really does chase away the monsters!
I really like that you didn’t anchor “shadows” down as a noun or a verb in the first line; the poem changes meaning depending on what the reader’s assumption is about that word.
Thanks! I hadn’t, but then when I was reading the tutorial again to make sure I got it down it specifically said not to make it a sentence so I was glad to see it worked properly for the form. You write a really good poetry instructional piece.
Christine
So melancholy; I love it. The sense of darkness layered over darkness is kind of breathtaking.
I love the sinister intrigue of this, and I think haiku is one of the hardest forms of poetry. You have to be so concise, and that juxtaposition is so hard to get right. You did it so well. The light/sunshine really does chase away the monsters!
Thanks! I kept changing things and then having to recount and adjust. The concept is easy, it’s the messing with it that gets tricky!
Love the Jekyll and Hyde idea you describe, or maybe a wilting flower, but that interpretation might be because I know how much you hate winter.
There’s some jeckyll-Hyde hidden meaning in there too along with the season aspect. I like that you picked up on that.
Oh, I too turn into something else in the absence of good sunlight. Dark so early. Can I go to bed now and not wake up until spring?
I am totally in favor of winter hibernation.
Oh, man… I know how much you hate the winter. And it’s only just begun…
Indeed. It’s quite an effort to not let winter get to me.
Beautifully done. I love how poetry can fit so many feelings into just a few words.
Thanks so much!
I really like that you didn’t anchor “shadows” down as a noun or a verb in the first line; the poem changes meaning depending on what the reader’s assumption is about that word.
I didn’t notice that until you pointed it out. Cool.
Thanks! I hadn’t, but then when I was reading the tutorial again to make sure I got it down it specifically said not to make it a sentence so I was glad to see it worked properly for the form. You write a really good poetry instructional piece.
So melancholy; I love it. The sense of darkness layered over darkness is kind of breathtaking.
That’s me, multiple layers of darkness.
This perfectly captures the way we both feel about winter!
My fellow winter hater!